A Rare stone from Egypt ( A golden story)
A Rare Stone From Egypt
This story is about one boy Arjun, he was worried because he wanted too much money, Arjun thought that he has not done anything for his parents and he wanted to do something for his parents , and he always thought that he is a burden for his parents and by this thought he was frustrating and he decided to do suicide .
He appeared near to the sea and he was about to dive in the sea , but suddenly one great Saint came there and he stopped Arjun to attempt suicide . Arjun said to saint that why did you stop me for doing suicide , I don't want live with this worst life . Saint told him why are saying this much bad about your life, you know this life is too much important and only fortunate people get this life. Arjun understood everything and he shared all the problems of his life to saint , saint understood everything about his problem and he says that I have one way through which you can take lots of money 💰, Arjun got shocked after listening it and he became exited and he tells to saint that what is that ways , he says that are watching these small stones which is around the sea , in these small stones has one rare stone of Egypt and this stone is million of years old and people believe that this stone is belongs to Lord Krishna .
Now you have a choice , would you like to find it , he said yes ! ( Energetically)
Saint gives him one identification about stone, he says that this rare stone is something warm then others stone.
From that day he was start finding that stone , he came everyday here and try to find that stone , 4 months passed away to do this thing and now also he was unable to find that rare stone but he didn't give up , he came everyday . Now Arjun became habitual to do this and it was changed into the habit , day by day he was becoming over smart and he start do one thing , if this stone is not warm he threw day stone in sea , he start doing this thing every day he repeated their routine like this .
The day came when that stone came on the hand of Arjun but just because of the habit he threw that stone into the sea , he said oh my god , what I have done , he was regretting that why did I throw that stone in sea.
The great Saint saw everything and he told that now you got the solution of your problem, you treat your day like as a usual day , you don't find that what is the productivity of the day and what is the opportunity. ( The opportunity is a rare stone for you but you didn't accept it, you threw it like as a simple stone but it was a rare stone for you)
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It was very well written by you bro. I praised to read it but it contains some flaws such as use of present tense, the in the 2nd line. It contains everything but I wants a better climax in it. 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏😂😂😂😂😂😍😍
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Pratham for giving me the appropriate and valuable feedback.
DeleteUnbelievable Amit !! 😃😃😃 You performed really a very great job . You must get appreciation for this 😊..this is from my side 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏. Your ending or denouement portion is knowledgeable and interesting . I like it . And if I talk about your area of improvement then , you can take charge on your tense structure and second thing you can eleborate your climax , a little bit more . It will be interesting for listeners and readers . And you can also look towards your raising action as you concise it some more , i.e . (Arjun understood everything and he shared all the problems of his life to saint , saint understood everything about his problem ) you can explain it a bit more ... As you can see , you conclude it in just 2 to 3 lines . I hope you get what I try to say 🙂. Except this , really bro I didn't find any kind of mistake or something else 😉.
ReplyDeleteCarry on !!!😊😊